Within Greg’s session (26/04/19), I continued with the production process of my project. Instead of focusing on my existing drafts, I decided to create new content that I know I will definitely include within my magazine. I will probably continue with the creation of new content next week as well.
Once I have created all of the content I need, I will go back over my existing drafts and edit them according to the tone and style I would have eventually developed.
Below is the first draft of a gig review I have written for my magazine. The review is written about L//NES’ recent performance at Margate’s Dreamland:
Overall, this session has allowed me to just write freely again. By writing from first-hand experience, I was able to detail certain aspects of the event that I wouldn’t have been able to if I hadn’t attended at all. Without the excessive use of notes I found, yet again, that my writing flowed much better. I was able to implement my creative writing style into my work as well, through the use of certain linguistic devices e.g. imagery, adjectives, metaphors etc.
Rio Dennis 
and create their own path – could you carry the metaphor on here: copy cats, herd
– trail, track
much alive; alive in the – use colon instead. Colon is either a list or can be read as illustrating the previous part of the sentence.
https://writingcenter.unc.edu/tips-and-tools/semi-colons-colons-and-dashes/
All in all – avoid phrases like this
blind eye on this band – to this band
Plus is this a song title? – is there a song title that you could use instead?
I asked a student to read this: she was impressed and said you had summed the gig up perfectly – her exact words were “sick”.
This is a very effective piece of writing – especially for a first draft. Excellent work.
Usual summary also very good.
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